Week from Hell - no just kidding
although it was a lot of information this week. This week was about rhyme schemes and rhyme types. rhyme schemes are how the lines end, is there a rhyme and what line it is matched to. different groupings of couplets can add to the stable or unstable concept. We learned about 5 rhyme types
Perfect
Family
Additive and Subtractive
Assonance
Consonance
Ranging from perfect to consonance the feel will be stable to unstable feel
This week's assignment was to write a stable verse leading to a unstable chorus. I was finding this difficult for some reason. Most of the time I feel the chorus is a stable statement - sums up the idea of the song which feels more solid. I wrote 4 different sets and was not happy with any really. posting 2 sets
Title - What should I say
Saw her with her friends
Mystery, and now She's here again
Feels just like before
Just go, over, or here's where it ends
What should I say
Man, I really hate this part
What should I say
Hey! you look great!
What should I say
(didn't feel verse was stable)
(with music for SAC facebook group)
This is the one I posted
Title - When is it our time
Watching the ocean
Waves are coming in
Feeling all the motion
Peace and joy within
When is it our time
Who knows how we’ll survive
Or is it time to live, time to take
Forget about tomorrow
When is it our time
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Week two was all about prosody - the working together of all the elements in a song and we focused on balanced and unbalanced. By using these 2 elements we can create tension and release type feelings and move the song foreward. Our exercise was to write a unbalanced verse and then a balanced chorus.
I wrote 3 and this I the one I submitted
( mine has a small pre chorus)
Title - Home
(verse 1 )
Walking on the street, sirens in the night
police cars screaming by
Outside TGIF's there was a fight
(Pre Chorus)
I can't wait to get, wait to get, to get
(Chorus)
Home, everything is alright
Home, everything is alright - when I'm here
Home, everything is alright
Home, everything is alright - tonight
Let's see how this goes :) good course!
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So lesson 1 was really great - Pat went into 4 types of narration
1st, 2nd, 3rd and direct address
and how to develop an idea with 3 boxes
You develop each box's idea further each time so the title has more meaning
This was my weeks exercise
Title: 2 Story House
1st box
She lives up there, mysterious angelic person, clean
2 Story House
2nd box
I'm down here, living in a dump apartment, wants to meet her
2 story house
3rd box
They meet on the stairs, they could never make a couple both story's are too different
2 story house
The point of view is 1st person
He is talking about the situation - to himself or omnipresent listener ( she lives up there, I am down here in this place)
He is trying to work it out whether the relationship could work
Where -The whole song takes place in a typical 2 story rental
Time frame is last night, today and now
It was also great evaluating 5 other assignments. Really liking this so far!!
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I have just started a 6 week course on lyric writing and will post my work and thoughts.
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This is the first post on my new blog Whew !!
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Week Three
Week from Hell - no just kidding although it was a lot of information this week. This week was about rhyme schemes and rhyme types. rhyme schemes are how the lines end, is there a rhyme and what line it is matched to. different groupings of couplets can add to the stable or unstable concept. We learned about 5 rhyme types Perfect Family Additive and Subtractive Assonance Consonance
Ranging from perfect to consonance the feel will be stable to unstable feel
This week's assignment was to write a stable verse leading to a unstable chorus. I was finding this difficult for some reason. Most of the time I feel the chorus is a stable statement - sums up the idea of the song which feels more solid. I wrote 4 different sets and was not happy with any really. posting 2 sets
Title - What should I say Saw her with her friends Mystery, and now She's here again Feels just like before Just go, over, or here's where it ends
What should I say Man, I really hate this part What should I say Hey! you look great! What should I say (didn't feel verse was stable) (with music for SAC facebook group)
This is the one I posted Title - When is it our time
Watching the ocean Waves are coming in Feeling all the motion Peace and joy within
When is it our time Who knows how we’ll survive Or is it time to live, time to take Forget about tomorrow When is it our time
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week two
Week two was all about prosody - the working together of all the elements in a song and we focused on balanced and unbalanced. By using these 2 elements we can create tension and release type feelings and move the song foreward. Our exercise was to write a unbalanced verse and then a balanced chorus. I wrote 3 and this I the one I submitted ( mine has a small pre chorus)
Title - Home
(verse 1 )
Walking on the street, sirens in the night
police cars screaming by
Outside TGIF's there was a fight
(Pre Chorus)
I can't wait to get, wait to get, to get
(Chorus)
Home, everything is alright
Home, everything is alright - when I'm here
Home, everything is alright
Home, everything is alright - tonight
Let's see how this goes :) good course!
Reply
week one
So lesson 1 was really great - Pat went into 4 types of narration 1st, 2nd, 3rd and direct address and how to develop an idea with 3 boxes
You develop each box's idea further each time so the title has more meaning
This was my weeks exercise
Title: 2 Story House 1st box She lives up there, mysterious angelic person, clean 2 Story House 2nd box I'm down here, living in a dump apartment, wants to meet her 2 story house
3rd box They meet on the stairs, they could never make a couple both story's are too different 2 story house
The point of view is 1st person He is talking about the situation - to himself or omnipresent listener ( she lives up there, I am down here in this place)
He is trying to work it out whether the relationship could work Where -The whole song takes place in a typical 2 story rental
Time frame is last night, today and now
It was also great evaluating 5 other assignments. Really liking this so far!!
Reply
Pat Pattison
I have just started a 6 week course on lyric writing and will post my work and thoughts.
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Hello There!!!
This is the first post on my new blog Whew !!
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